Your websites cool, but thats our picture. We don't care if you technically had it first.
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Sunderland-Polished Draft
5/23/2010 06:41:17 am
-Nice draft. Lots of good stuff here. Some suggestions:
-Very very texty. You've got to get rid of most of your complete sentences. Only complete sentences should be thesis statement and page topic sentences. Everything else of yours should be phrases and bullets.
-Very long quotes. Either excerpt more to make them shorter or highlight key phrases in the quotes.
-Make quotes and your writing more obviously distinct from each other. Change font size, style, or color.
-Each page should have a title and page topic sentence (like every paragraph of an essay starts with a topic sentence.)
-Images should have captions that indicate significance of the image.
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